Do. Not. Want.

Another rejection, this time from Harlequin Mills & Boon Romance.

This was for Her Cinderella Secret, which placed third in the Toronto Romance Writers' Golden Opportunity contest in the contemporary romance category. I find it interesting how different people like and dislike different things about the manuscript. I don't think any one opinion is wrong, but it hammers home the adage: You can't please everyone.

So, back to the old drawing board....

My next step will be to have another looksee, work out some kinks and submit to Carina Press.

In case you're interested, here are the first rejections for the first drafts of this MS. It was significantly revised for the Golden Opp contest.

From Silhouette Special Edition, and Wild Rose Press.

2 thoughts on “Do. Not. Want.

  1. moor

    I know this isn't directly related to the post -- more what you posted on FB, but I had a question about it. ^^;

    " Victory Essex Another great Eureka moment from critique group: Eliminate all rhetorical questions from narrative. Thanks, @michellerowen!"

    What does this mean? (I'm drawing a blank... for some reason, I just don't understand! XD) Removing rhetorical questions from narrative?.... As in, remove sarcasm from the narrative voice?... ^^;

    (Hope the re-writing is going well! 😉 )

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  2. Victory Essex

    Rhetorical questions, as in "What was she thinking?" or "How could she do that?" Phrases that are throwaway lines; ones you'd think would emphasize something, but in fact, draw attention to lazy writing. The reader is already asking him/herself these exact questions, so you don't need to repeat them.
    Example:

    Beatrice sighed. What was she going to do? How would she deal with her mother's demands and balance them with Jared's need for security? She couldn't think of a solution that didn't include murder and blackmail.

    Eliminate the rhetorical and you get:

    Beatrice sighed. She couldn't think of a solution to her dilemma that didn't include murder and blackmail.

    It's all about tight writing. 8 )

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