Thank you so much for giving me the opportunity to consider your manuscript Her Cinderella Secret. While I really enjoyed the read, I'm sorry to say I can't offer you a contract with The Wild Rose Press at this time. I was impressed by your smooth, flowing, clever and original writing style; however, I felt that the story's plotline didn't meet the high standards you'd set with your writing and character development. To begin with, I was concerned about the fact the heroine has a physical relationship with the hero while she believes he's seeing another woman; this could make the heroine less likeable or relatable to the reader. On a larger scale, most of the conflicts between the hero and heroine seem to be based on mistaken identities and misunderstandings, rather than developing from actual interior, character-based conflicts. As a result, the hero and heroine's journey doesn't have as much at stake, and it comes off a bit too similar to stories we've seen many times before.
Again, I was impressed by your writing style, and I definitely think you have potential as an author. Thanks again for allowing me to read your work.
To be honest, I knew the inherent flaws in the conflict of my story. The best romances are based on character-driven conflicts, and mine didn't quite hit that mark. So even though I'm a little disappointed, I'm not too surprised.